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Summary: Ben is willing to do anything to make Rook see him as a potential mate, even turn himself into something he's not. Will Rook like the new Ben enough to notice him or will he finally see that the original Ben is the one he wants? Slash. Yaoi. Ben/Rook AKA Broken. Be aware of the M rating. There will be mature content in later chapters.
Rook couldn't look away.

The Plumber's headquarters could have been on fire around him and he still wouldn't have been able to tear his gaze from the sight before him. None of the several languages he knew had words that could adequately describe it and so he was left speechless by it's brilliance.

Ben shifted uncomfortably and self-consciously touched one of his newly pointed ears.

As the wielder of the Omnitrix Ben was used to being stared at strangely, but it was weird to see Rook doing it after being his partner for over a year. Surely the older alien had seen him take odder forms than that of a teenage Revonnahgander.

Ben waited a minute more, hoping that Rook would say something, but the older alien just continued to stare.

"Rook, you okay? I'm not that ugly a Revonnahgander am I?" Ben asked somewhat anxiously.  

Rook gulped slightly and finally tore his gaze away from Ben.

Truly the younger teen looked like a qwerty, a perfect Revonnahgander in every way.

His new ears had the upsweep look of the ancients and his marks were so beautifully symmetrical he'd have drawn looks of admiration from anyone on Revonnah.

His body was slim as all of his people were, but it was subtly curved the in the most appealing way, looking powerful yet delicate.

But more than anything Rook had been utterly entranced by Ben's familiar toxic green eyes staring at him from the body of a Revonnahgander he would have fought suitors for.  

Green eyes on his home world were considered a blessing beyond all measure and so incredibly rare he had never seen someone with them.

The first time he'd locked eyes with Ben Tennyson he'd felt his breath catch at the sight of them, but now coupled with his new form's beauty Rook was taken aback.

He had never in his life been so physically attracted to another person. He'd known since birth that he was ghajik, one who favored males to females, but he had never wanted someone as much as he wanted his partner right now.

If Ben had been a true Revonnahgander and they had met on his home world Rook wouldn't have hesitated to try and win Ben as his own.

The realization was staggering and while Ben had always caused Rook to feel more than he was used to, he'd never made him feel this way before.

Ben meanwhile just continued to look at him curiously, worried about his silence.

Rook had to close his eyes to shield himself from the sight as he gathered his thoughts enough to answer Ben's question.

"I'm fine Ben. You do not look displeasing by Revonnahgander standards, it was simply…….surprising to see you take the form of a Revonnahgander instead of one of your normal choices. I was unaware you had access to my species."

Ben smiled somewhat hesitantly and touched the Omnitrix shaped pattern imprinted on his upper arm.

"Grandpa said that were going on an undercover mission tomorrow on a planet near your home world and I needed to look less noticeable. I figured I'd look less conspicuous as another Revonnahgander than as me. What do you think?"

Rook could hear the uncertainty and hesitation in Ben's voice, so different than his normally cheerful and self confident attitude.

A part of his mind wondered why that was, but the rest was focused on trying to think coherently enough to answer Ben's question.

"It sounds like a good plan, but the Omnitrix seldom seems to give you what you ask or keeps the same form long. It wouldn't be good for you to change back into you mid-mission."

Ben smirked slightly and the sight made Rook's body heat up uncontrollably.

"I finally got my appointment with Azmuth that he's been promising me since I was ten. He taught me a couple of new tricks to get the Omnitrix to do what I want it to. I can stay this way up to five hours now before it'll time out."

Rook was both elated and distraught at this news. On one hand the thought of staring at Ben in his current form for hours was very appealing, but on the other he wasn't sure if he could control himself if Ben got too close. Every instinct inside him told him to claim and mark Ben as his own, a primal urge that despite millennia of evolution his species had never truly lost.

Rook had a feeling the more time he spent with Ben in this form the more likely he was to give into those urges. He knew if he did though, he could lose everything, his place with the Plumber's, his rank, and worst of all Ben. He'd become incredibly close to the teen and the thought of losing Ben's friendship made his heart ache.  

He resolved there and then to bury his feelings as deep inside him as possible to protect Ben. The younger male could never know how badly Rook wanted him in this form. It would ruin everything.
Ben stared at himself in the mirror for a long moment, dressed in his borrowed Proto-Tech armor and torn between feeling happy and guilty. It had been a long time since he'd used the Omnitrix for his own gain and even though this was a mission Ben couldn't help but feel like he was taking advantage of the situation.

He could have chosen to go as another alien, almost anything other than his human form would have worked, but ever since Azmuth had shown him the Revonnahgander option on the Omnitrix he hadn't been able to get the thought out of his head.

He wanted to be a Revonnahgander, if just for a little while. He wanted to see if he and Rook were just a little more alike if he could win the older man's affections.

He'd been crushing on his partner for almost 7 months now and no matter what he did he couldn't get Rook to notice him the way he wanted him to.

It was painfully obvious to Ben that Rook had never even had a passing thought of him in a romantic way and he wanted to change that. He wanted more than anything for Rook to see him as a potential boyfriend.

Rook's reaction yesterday severely dampened that hope. If nothing Rook had looked almost sick at the sight of Ben as a Revonnahgander. Ben thought he looked decent, but he had seen few Revonnahganders in his life in which to compare himself.

Ben wasn't about to give up though. He as going to be the best Revonnahgander he could be and make Rook see he was worth loving.

With that thought in mind Ben smiled and made his way out to where Rook was waiting for him.
Next CH: [link]

This story is going to be about 25 pages long, contain M-rated scenes, and is dedicated to bbb35!!

She totally inspired me to write this and I aspire to write Broken just as good as she does!!

I hope you all like it. Please read and review!

P.S: I'd love some fan art to use as a cover for this story if anyone is interested.

Yours truly,

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TinyWolf01 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
omfg!!u have 2 do more!! i'm on da end of my sit!! no one's done this so i'm SO over joy!! i want 2 pop in happiness!! .....i was thinkin bout makin a story kinda like this but it looks like u beat me 2 it. xD oh well.
jessica499499 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Trust me, you won't believe where I'm going to go with this. If you have a similar idea feel free to post it. I love to read new Broken, it inspires me!
TinyWolf01 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
i can't wait. :3 i'll need 2 get a new notebook then.i have 2 write in a notebook 1st.
spitfiresdad16 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this is gonna be good. Gearing up for a soap opera level drama!
jessica499499 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Oh it's going to way past soap opera drama.
spitfiresdad16 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
EPIC!! Let's do this!
1stSuperboyFan Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Awesome. Also bbb35 is a great writer to look up too. This my just be me but I'm getting a Megan vibe from Ben right now also know has shape-shifter true form denial.
jessica499499 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I didn't even think of that, but it's a good point. All shape-shifters seem to have some kind of self consciousness about their true form. I wish they'd bring that up in an episode.
Midknight-Hikari Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is an amazing start off!
It never really crossed my mind that the Omnitrix can take Revonnahgander DNA, pretty clever for you to use this in your story :)

Please continue! :heart:
jessica499499 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I'd kill to see MOA really turn Ben into a Revonnahgander in the show. But I'll be happy when the show the episode of Ben and Rook as children.
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